How's My Driving?

Here's the thing -- I've never played Tadashi before and I've been out of the rp world for a long time.
I tend to get excited and dive headlong into things, but I'm always looking for things to improve. This isn't just a HMD for my characterization,
but also my writing. I absolutely will not take offense if you have some helpful pointers for things I can improve on.
Especially if you actually tell me where to go to learn about the stuff I'm bad at. Like punctuation. And fragments.

Seriously, though. If Tadashi is off in any way, let me know and I will do my best to improve.

Edit as of 4/12/18: Whoa boy, I am coming at RP out of left field. All of the above still applies twice as hard as ever. And I do know about the tense shifting thing, if that's bothering anyone. I'm doing some research to try to hammer it into my brain and fix it as quickly as possible.